My English Paper

Category: Cram Session

Post 1 by asdfghjkl (Account disabled) on Monday, 17-Jan-2005 15:16:37

Hi, All,

For English prep paper, I wrote this. Tell me what you think...

Much Love to Y'all and God Bless,
Mel
XOX

Prompt: Write about someone who has made an important difference in your life.

I stood, fists clinched, at the starting line.

"Come on, Mel, you did this at Camp Life; you can do it again," I thought to myself. Many memories flew through my mind. In the past my sight loss had caused many fears. One of those fears was of sports. For one thing I've never really been good at them in the first place, no matter how hard I've tried. I think, for example, that not being able to see so well intimidated me while running, and it slowed me down. The reason is, when I was little, at recess I would just be running and having a good old time and BOOM! I'd bump smack into a streetlight pole or tree, I'd fall in a ditch, or I'd run into someone, most likely a little kid, and I would feel awful. This changed when I went to Camp Life, a summer camp organized as a thesis for and by Vickie Fedder. Our coach was Cody Colchado. He was visually impaired, and he had competed and been a champion in some events in the paralympics. He was amazing! I remember when he walked on a tipped over phone pole backwards with his eyes closed. I would have been much too afraid to do anything like that. I remember when he taught me how to throw a shot put hand over hand. He applauded me even when my throws were crooked or when I forgot a step. I remember when I had to run toward a beeping target, blindfolded, while I was learning some basic concepts of beep baseball.

"Go for it; don't be afraid!" he said while I waited my turn fearfully. When it came, I rocketed across the gym (about 100 feet) in 8.85 seconds, nearly knocking over Jeff who was holding the beeper. Everyone applauded. I actually felt like I had done something right! I remember when I would be running on the track. I could hear Coach Cody yelling: "Go, go, go, go!" When I reached the finish line, everyone would cheer. This encouraged me one day during practice, especially after my friend Eugene lost a bet that he could beat me twice in a row. I beat HIM twice in a row! Ha! How about that?! Finally, after one week of training, all the campers were to compete against each other. I won gold metals for the 50 meter dash, the 100 meter dash, the shot put, and the running long jump. Also, my goal ball team, The Champions, which consisted of Denise, Fallon, Kristi, and me won second place in the tournament. At the award ceremony, Coach Cody showed us some of the metals he had won in the paralympics. When I received my first gold, I almost cried because it looked EXACTLY like his! It had the same acronym USABA (USA Blind Athletes) in Braille on it. It meant a lot to me. It was time to go home. I begged my dad to let me say goodbye to Coach Cody. He gave me the biggest, warmest hug and said: "You wanna know what I want you to do? Not only do I want you to keep training, but keep getting good grades in school and always remember that Jesus loves you." Was he… crying…?! Yes, Sir, he most certainly was! "I'm so proud of you! I love you very much. Take care, OK?" He kissed me on my left cheek.

"OK. You too," I said.

"God bless you." Coach Cody believed in me when I couldn't and didn't believe in myself…

"On your mark!…" the person with the gun and loud speaker yelled. I came back to reality. My hands had grown slightly numb from clinching my fists so tightly. I had loosened my grip a little. I shook them and gripped again. My blood stirred like a hurricane. There was still a hint of that old fear of falling on my face or tripping on my shoelaces. No, that was impossible; I had made ABSOLUTELY sure they were tied. I sighed and smiled.

"Mel, you're gonna do just fine…"

"Get set!…" I looked around and listened as if Coach Cody would be there cheering me on. POW! And there I went, leaving my other two fellow competitors in my dust. I flew like never before, and… I passed the finish line?! What?! That was it?! Had I won?! Had I really won?! Again?! No way! 17.49 seconds?! I walked around aimlessly to keep from passing out or something. My friend Janelle who happened to be helping out came to get me. As we walked off arm in arm toward the award platform, I could hear random people shouting random things at me. I wasn't really paying attention; I was still shocked that I actually won!…

Post 2 by bearj (Account disabled) on Monday, 17-Jan-2005 15:21:39

wow that was great. great job. you are a great writter. smiles

Post 3 by asdfghjkl (Account disabled) on Monday, 17-Jan-2005 15:22:29

thx justin... hehe

Post 4 by bearj (Account disabled) on Monday, 17-Jan-2005 15:23:43

wow you described that so well. I am a bad writer.

Post 5 by asdfghjkl (Account disabled) on Monday, 17-Jan-2005 15:25:59

how can u b so sure?... hey if any1 wants 2 c my novels ive written, i dun like em that much but if any1 wants 2 c em holla and ill hook a brother up

Post 6 by bearj (Account disabled) on Monday, 17-Jan-2005 15:29:02

i want one i want one i want one lmao

Post 7 by Caitlin (I've now got the silver prolific poster award! wahoo!) on Monday, 17-Jan-2005 15:33:05

Hi Melmel! This paper is awesome, it's told with such passion and such dscriptive language! Omgosh! I love it! I love to run but I also have that fear of running into stuff, at least you can see a little rotfl! Anyway! Your paper gave me hope that maybe someday I'll learn to get over that fear. Great job, you'd better get an A+ on that eheheh or I'll get yoru teacher jkjkkjk!!!! XOXOOXOXOX!!!
Caitcait

Post 8 by asdfghjkl (Account disabled) on Monday, 17-Jan-2005 15:36:59

rotfllmao, ill get my teacher 2! lmao but shes the bestest if i dun get a 4 on it its cuzza my punctuation but i did it that way 4 a certain affect/mood thing. anyways... ya i wun b able 2 c 4 long and im scared.... but i know gods gonna help me thru it. yes i stil have that fear of running into stuff but that helped me get over it waaay better than i was... i think ull get over it 2

Post 9 by Caitlin (I've now got the silver prolific poster award! wahoo!) on Monday, 17-Jan-2005 15:38:48

Well Mel, when you get over it tell me how! Hehehe! And I'll be here for you too! I mean I can see light and dark and outline of stuff but that's it, and it's not like it helps me. So I'm considered totally blind heheeh! 'Cuz to see shadows they ahve to be just the right distance or angle away so I don't see them a lot. Anyhow! XOXOOX great job and I know you'll get an A++++!
Caitlin

Post 10 by asdfghjkl (Account disabled) on Monday, 17-Jan-2005 15:40:50

lmao caitcait... my sight isnt gonna b like that even. most likely my retinas will completely fall apart and i wont even see light, dark, shadows,... nothing. anyways! lmao

Post 11 by Caitlin (I've now got the silver prolific poster award! wahoo!) on Monday, 17-Jan-2005 15:46:07

You'll be like Derek then, he'll probably give you a few pointers, though he's been blind all his life so he won't know aboutl osing it but yeah. I'm sure there are others out there and you'll find them. You could post a topic asking about it on here.
Caitcait

Post 12 by asdfghjkl (Account disabled) on Monday, 17-Jan-2005 16:22:04

ya i might but ill only do so when the time comes. oooh is it just me or did that sound really creeeeepy?

Post 13 by Goblin (I have proven to myself and the world that I need mental help) on Thursday, 20-Jan-2005 13:33:22

Stunning you really caught the bewilderment and frustration of a blind childhood, then the elation of all that longed for success..all in all a masterpiece!

Post 14 by asdfghjkl (Account disabled) on Thursday, 20-Jan-2005 18:32:08

thx alex *smile*

Post 15 by commanderlumpy (Veteran Zoner) on Thursday, 20-Jan-2005 19:23:55

Hello students. I am commanderlumpy. I don't post much. However that was a outstand paper Song Writer. I use to do track, and cross crountry. It baught back many memories. I also think that paper is a good one for encouragement. Something we all need. I will talk to you later.

Post 16 by Caitlin (I've now got the silver prolific poster award! wahoo!) on Friday, 21-Jan-2005 21:01:49

HI Melmel. Yeah, of course. Whenevery ou feel comfortable, I might recommend asking about it. Lol. And yes that did sound creeepy hehehe, what you said. And this paper is truly great. You should post yoru stories on here.
Caitlin

Post 17 by asdfghjkl (Account disabled) on Friday, 21-Jan-2005 21:49:54

ha ha ha, i think theyd b 2 long lol...

Post 18 by Caitlin (I've now got the silver prolific poster award! wahoo!) on Saturday, 22-Jan-2005 1:34:30

Nawawawaw. That's what writer's block is for. Muahahah go for it!!! If you want ...
Caitlin

Post 19 by asdfghjkl (Account disabled) on Saturday, 22-Jan-2005 14:11:13

i dun wanna make ppl mad tho by makeing a realy looong post... or a few long ones... anyone besides caitcait wanna c my novels? otherwise i wun bother cuz shes already seen em...

Post 20 by Caitlin (I've now got the silver prolific poster award! wahoo!) on Saturday, 22-Jan-2005 14:50:07

If anyone gets mad at you for that, Mel, I will kill them!!! Hwehweheheheh. No one bug Mel ever hehehe jkjk. Caitlin

Post 21 by asdfghjkl (Account disabled) on Saturday, 22-Jan-2005 15:37:13

lmao u rock caitcait he he xoxox

Post 22 by Caitlin (I've now got the silver prolific poster award! wahoo!) on Saturday, 22-Jan-2005 15:38:45

You rock too Melmel heheheheehehe! Yaya!~ Caitcait

Post 23 by The SHU interpreter (I just keep on posting!) on Saturday, 22-Jan-2005 16:26:52

well I did a paper which was 9 pages on the medieval customs and traditions.I remember that my thesis statement was that "Medieval Traditions and customs were very different from today’s Customs; therefore, some of them are well known for their grate cultural influence." I got an a plus on that paper. I even wrote that girls married at the age of 12 and boys at the age of 14. Anyway, what do you think about that statement? post any coments
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Post 24 by asdfghjkl (Account disabled) on Saturday, 22-Jan-2005 19:23:25

hmmm i like

Post 25 by Caitlin (I've now got the silver prolific poster award! wahoo!) on Saturday, 22-Jan-2005 20:00:10

Sounds good Priscy. I wrote a paper on Medieval Medicine. It was graphic and I loved it! Heh. Caitlin

Post 26 by asdfghjkl (Account disabled) on Saturday, 19-Feb-2005 10:37:09

OK, finally, yesterday, I found out what I got on this paper. It was an 18 out of 20 (a low 4), which would be like a 90. Just thought I'd let y'all know.

Post 27 by Caitlin (I've now got the silver prolific poster award! wahoo!) on Saturday, 19-Feb-2005 13:59:53

That rocks melmel! Congrats! XOXOOXOXXXOXX!